Down on the dumps



“Hillside Dump,” Gene Daniels, Photographer.

As you’ve probably noted, I’ve read a number of novels by obscure writers in the last year or so, when they became available free or very cheap for Kindle. I think such reading is actually beneficial for a writer, because it teaches vicariously, through others’ mistakes.

The previous paragraph, by the way, can be described as exposition. Exposition tells back story, sets up the situation, and prepares the reader for what is to come.

And what is to come is a post about exposition.

The dreaded Info Dump is one of the most common mistakes I observe among fledgling novelists. You’ve probably run across it yourself. The characters are going along, doing whatever it is they do, and then the author stops everything to

a)Tell you the back story of the characters, or the country, or the world, in his own voice, or

b)Have one of the characters do it.

In general, option b is better than option a, but either can annoy the heck out of your readers if done clumsily.

There’s a particular fantasy writer, of whose books I have read one and a half. In the second book I tackled, his main character rode into a new country about half way through the story, and everything stopped while the author delivered an extended lecture on the whole history of that country. I dropped the book and never tried another of his.

Now this author is far more successful than I am, so he probably possesses many virtues I lack. But I still say there was no warrant for that kind of info dump.

There are good ways to give your reader the same information, without braking to a full stop.

One of the best is simply to introduce a character who’s a stranger, and get somebody (or several people) to explain things to him. That’s why so many good books center on strangers going to new places.

(By the way, the information doesn’t have to be dispensed all at once. You can introduce it bit by bit, as the story warrants. The stranger character asks, and he gets his answers. It’s natural and true to life, and pretty painless for the reader. It’s also not necessary to satisfy the stranger’s curiosity right away. Let him be mystified for a while. The reader will share his mystification, and it will add to the intrigue of the story.)

One caveat — For heaven’s sake, have the person who is informed be someone who needs informing. Nothing destroys a story’s credibility like the dreaded “As you know,” speech, such as, “As you know, Fred, I am your elder brother.”

If you have to do an info dump, for heaven’s sake break it up a little. In Wolf Time, my main character is a college instructor who gives a lecture on Norwegian history that provides background for the supernatural occurrences to come. But I don’t just transcribe his lecture text. I have students interrupt and argue with him. This allows us to get to know him better, to see what kind of man he is, even while information is being imparted. People tell me that worked pretty well.

You can always “show, don’t tell,” too. Instead of having somebody explain how your character’s grandfather came to possess the Mystic Snoose Tin of Wanamingo, you can add a vignette, perhaps (but not necessarily) at the beginning of the story, presenting that discovery as a self-contained story within the narrative.

Those are a couple of techniques for exposition that come to mind offhand. There are probably more, and I’ll share them if I think of any.

0 thoughts on “Down on the dumps”

  1. As you know, Lars, I’m your fellow blogger, and as such, I read this post with interest. I too remember a fantasy book, not the one you mention, where the story abruptly stops for the narrator to tell us a variety of character details whenever someone new enters the room. But the technique that irritated me most was the pattern of internal dialogue from the main character. It was natural for him to be thinking about things as he traveled, but nothing he thought ever advanced the story. It was just rehashing what we already knew. It was tedious.

  2. I do think this aversion to info-dumps is a 20th-21st century phenomenon, though. My daughter is reading Les Miserables for the first time, and she has yet to get to the actual story. Hugo goes on for pages and pages about the background of a bishop who will be important in the first scene of the novel and then will never appear again. As I remember, he explains the history of post-Napoleonic France forever later in the book, and he takes us on a tour of the sewers of Paris that is infamous. Tolstoy and Dickens do the same sort of thing in their novels, and don’t get me started on the chapter about the whiteness of the whale in Moby Dick. Yes, they can get away with things that mid-list writers can’t, but I really think TV and movies have spoiled us for slow-moving expositional novels that stop here and there and meander into byways of explanation and then wander back to the point, maybe.

  3. I listened to Les Miserables, which helped me get through it all, and I enjoyed the parts you mentioned or didn’t mind them, but I couldn’t keep up with the part where he introduces all of Marius’ friends. It sounded like a never-ending list of isolated details with occasional quotables. I had to skip ahead to the story at that point. I really thought about skipping the history of the convent before that, but I hung with it long enough to get through it.

  4. Even before reading the comments I was thinking of Les Miserables. For me the greatest offense was taking off for 100 pages to describe the Battle of Waterloo in detail because a minor character had a wound or bad memory or some other after effect of that battle. It’s been 25 years since I read it and that lengthy aside is still what comes to mind whenever I think of Victor Hugo.

  5. I wonder how well it would work to have the exposition as an argument between two fairly equal characters (not a professor and his students).

    In real life, you can learn a lot from having people argue about something in front of you.

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